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Tuesday, 26 December 2017

SLJ W2 Bonus Activity: Crossing the Tasman

I would feel very happy and glad that I made it all the way. 
       

Image result for old plane

We have arived in Christchurch
By plane so much gain
So glad not sad
Can you believe i'm relieved
Happy i'm not wearing a nappy
Surprised to be revived.
 By Caleb I
 






3 comments:

  1. Hello again Caleb,

    Thanks for attempting this bonus activity, I like the picture you've provided of the plane, how old is it?
    Do you think you could attempt the poem part here? Remember, there are many different ways you can write a poem. You can follow this link to read more about different styles of poetry: https://www.buzzle.com/articles/types-of-poems-for-kids.html

    In your poem (much like writing a short story) you can elaborate a little bit more on why you would feel very happy to make it all the way on your journey. You could start off by how you feel in the beginning and then build off from that. And poetry doesn't necessarily have to rhyme either.

    Give it a go, and I'll monitor this blog post. I'll be sure to award you with full points once you attempt a poem here.

    Keep up the good effort!

    Cheers,

    Jordan.

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    1. Hi Jordan
      I have added a poem to this post, im not very good at making a poem, but I have tried, I hope you like it. I find it hard to understand poems sometimes. do you ?
      Thanks
      Caleb I

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  2. Hi Caleb!

    I am so glad you took up Jordan's challenge to try a poem! Awesome work!
    I like the line "happy I'm not wearing a nappy" hehe ....maybe they might have needed nappies on a 14 hour flight!
    The ending "surprised to be revived" is also very powerful, awesome job!
    I think for someone who finds poems hard to work around you've done a great job :)
    Don't worry about finding them difficult, I definitely do!

    Keep up the great work Caleb!
    Ellee :)

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